literature

I LIED...

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I feel so empty
I am not whole.
I feel so numb
Without a heart or soul.

I feel out of place
In this world of care.
I feel at home
In my own dark lair.

I feel so useless
Like a person without a future.
I feel so unimportant
Like the background of a picture.

I feel so tired
Yet I've done nothing but sleep.
I feel so fatigued
When my alarm clock beeps.

I feel so depressed
Even when I am with everyone.
I feel so sad
When everyone else is having fun.

I feel like I have no family
I am like a maid that is not paid.
I feel like I am alone
Like I have no one to come to my aid.

I feel so old
But I am so young.
I feel close to my end
But I have just begun.

Every single day
I say that I feel fine.
Well, I LIED
Almost every single time.
probably my best poem ever...
please leave a comment for me and don't be mean and say that it sucks cause i already realize that it's not that good...

Edit-
thanks for all the nice comments!
also i did not take the preview picture i found it online...
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FuyuViech's avatar
Wow, this is very direct, simple and modern despite the rhyme scheme. But this makes it easier for people to relate to the poem's content. Expressive and touching! It feels as if you didn't even need to force rhymes into every stave to make it sound well.
I like how the last part differs from the previous staves but sums the entire poem up at the same time, very nice ending. :)